Day 135.1: No Bite
Sep. 28th, 2024 09:11 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
I wrote quite substantially today, but I felt that my writing had no bite. I didn't feel that frustration of fitting words properly, and that made me suspect what I wrote. Maybe it's too dense? Too boring? Maybe the first scene needs streamlining, and Seiran needs to rein in her hostility. I don't peg Seiran as fiery, exactly, but I don't think she'd take things lying down. Only, I think she wouldn't pick fights. She'd lament. I'd always pegged her as a bit sneaky, giving out faint praise and being rather supine otherwise. This Seiran is downright fiery, when I want her uncooperative. I think I have the first bits down, but I'll have to change the wording to reflect Seiran not cooperating instead of being hostile to Reisen and Kaguya, pointing out uncomfortable truths instead of confronting them exactly.
Time for another rewrite!
Time for another rewrite!